Some people consider sports to be their career in the society. For others, it is mostly a workout to stay fit.​ Discuss both views and give your own opinion.​

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A number of
people
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reckon that being an athlete is an option in their
career
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. Other
people
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think that workout is to keep healthy. The writer will consider both points of view about
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case. A
career
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is a
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for everyone. Some
people
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choose their own
career
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since they knew their actual skills, and it is a common aspect in public. Mostly, society chooses to be an athlete, or at least they do exercise frequently.
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, if
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know that
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exercising
excercising
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exercising
is a must to keep healthy, they will do sport frequently, but in reality, they lack
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the motivation
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to exercise
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.
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, they would prefer become choose other careers in life.
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, a
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is about a
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or right for all
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. In another hand, I have my own individual
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that has a
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for selecting the future. I obviously think that sport should be applied as
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a hobby
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because today many diseases
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caused by laziness.
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, it can be better to socialize the beneficial of
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exercising
for numerous
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elder
people
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. I think the authority should narrate the life-or-death information for
keping
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keeping
healthy in order that
people
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who have not known yet becoming interested, and others who have realized can be more diligent.
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, I think that it is high-priority information which is shared in society. To summarize, there are both sides to conclude
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information.
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is important to
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both through a part of
excercising
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exercising
, and future of person can be ensured from
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the sport
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. I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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those are about the right of them to choose what the
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public
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