Some people consider sports to be their career in the society. For others, it is mostly a workout to stay fit. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
A number of
people
reckon that being an athlete is an option in their career
. Other people
think that workout is to keep healthy. The writer will consider both points of view about this
case.
A career
is a choice
for everyone. Some people
choose their own career
since they knew their actual skills, and it is a common aspect in public. Mostly, society chooses to be an athlete, or at least they do exercise frequently. For example
, if people
know that Correct your spelling
exercising
excercising
is a must to keep healthy, they will do sport frequently, but in reality, they lack Correct your spelling
exercising
of
the motivation Remove the preposition
apply
exercise
.Fix the infinitive
to exercise
As a result
, they would prefer become choose other careers in life. Hence
, a career
is about a choice
or right for all people
.
In another hand, I have my own individual choice
that has a choice
for selecting the future. I obviously think that sport should be applied as hobby
because today many diseases Add an article
a hobby
is
caused by laziness. Change the verb form
are
Therefore
, it can be better to socialize the beneficial of excercising
for numerous Correct your spelling
exercising
people
especially
elder Add the comma(s)
,especially
people
. I think the authority should narrate the life-or-death information for keping
healthy in order that Correct your spelling
keeping
people
who have not known yet becoming interested, and others who have realized can be more diligent. Thus
, I think that it is high-priority information which is shared in society.
To summarize, there are both sides to conclude this
information. Career
is important to be struggled
both through a part of Change to the active voice
struggle
have struggled
excercising
, and future of person can be ensured from Correct your spelling
exercising
sport
. I Add an article
the sport
Correct your spelling
believe
belive
those are about the right of them to choose what the Correct your spelling
believe
pubclic
.Correct your spelling
public
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