Some people consider sports to be their career in the society. For others, it is mostly a workout to stay fit.​ Discuss both views and give your own opinion.​

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A number of
people
reckon that being an athlete is an option in their
career
. Other
people
think that workout is to keep healthy. The writer will consider both points of view about
this
case. A
career
is a
choice
for everyone. Some
people
choose their own
career
since they knew their actual skills, and it is a common aspect in public. Mostly, society chooses to be an athlete, or at least they do exercise frequently.
For example
, if
people
know that
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exercising
excercising
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exercising
is a must to keep healthy, they will do sport frequently, but in reality, they lack
of
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the motivation
exercise
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to exercise
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.
As a result
, they would prefer become choose other careers in life.
Hence
, a
career
is about a
choice
or right for all
people
. In another hand, I have my own individual
choice
that has a
choice
for selecting the future. I obviously think that sport should be applied as
hobby
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because today many diseases
is
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caused by laziness.
Therefore
, it can be better to socialize the beneficial of
excercising
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exercising
for numerous
people
especially
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elder
people
. I think the authority should narrate the life-or-death information for
keping
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keeping
healthy in order that
people
who have not known yet becoming interested, and others who have realized can be more diligent.
Thus
, I think that it is high-priority information which is shared in society. To summarize, there are both sides to conclude
this
information.
Career
is important to
be struggled
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struggle
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both through a part of
excercising
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exercising
, and future of person can be ensured from
sport
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the sport
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. I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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those are about the right of them to choose what the
pubclic
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public
.
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