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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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When it comes to erecting new
railway
 lines within a country for very fast trains between cities, some
people
 opine that it is necessary while others think we should spend money on enhancing current public
transport
. In my point of view, it is worthwhile to do a mixture of both. On the one hand, newly modern
railway
 systems play an important role in the development of countries these days.
This
 means of transportation is definitely economically beneficial to their travel and transportation. Take good examples, citizens could save a large amount of time for commute and companies themselves reduce financial burdens in terms of delivering or shipping goods.
Also
, investment in fast
railway
 lines helps pave the way for promoting domestic tourism. Indeed, they are a way of building bridges between tourist attractions, and, in essence, they contribute to opening the doors to many opportunities and economic benefits for remote areas and underdeveloped regions
through
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tourism.
On the other hand
, we
also
need
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 pay more attention to the improvement of existing public
transport
. Obviously, we need a superior public
transport
 system for safety reasons.
This
 helps limit a variety of risks while
people
 and goods are in transit including serious accidents or crashes involving conveyances
in
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as
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consequence
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a consequence
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 of the poor quality of the transit system.
Besides
, the better
transport
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the transport
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 system for public use is, the more satisfied and believable
people
 might get when using it. Nowadays, many
people
 feel afraid of travelling by
this
 kind of
transport
 by reason of increasing concerns related to pickpockets or thieves so it is crucial to devote money to the measures of security. For the aforementioned opinions, it seems to me that it is deserved
spending
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 money on both the construction of new
railway
 lines and the improvement of existing public
transport
.
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