In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays
transportation
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plays an important role in our daily life. Some
people
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say we should spend more
money
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to build a new
railway
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which is much faster.
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, I do not agree with
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view.In my opinion, we should spend more funds on improving other transport. On the one hand, building a new
railway
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has numerous advantages.
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, the company can deliver the items faster which can save a variety of costs on delivery.
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,
people
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can go to another city in a more efficient way.
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, the boss who has clients in different cities can visit all of them a day because of the higher speed of the new
railway
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.So some
people
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say we need to send more
money
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on building up a new
railway
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.
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, there are lots of different types of
transportation
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which need improvement. Obviously, the basic
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in the countryside or village needs to be improved
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.
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, there are numerous villages that do not have bus stops, which is inconvenient for the habitants there to go to the city to buy the essential items in daily life.
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we should spend the
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to improve
transportation
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like the bus in the countryside. To summarize, the advantages of spending more
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on building a faster
railway
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are it can cost down the spending on delivery and
people
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can go to other cities in a higher efficient way.The disadvantage is we should use the
money
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to construct the basic
transportation
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in the countryside. In my
opinion
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I think we should build up the basic
transportation
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in villages if we ignore
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problem, the gap in education or economy between the cities and the villages will become larger if we do not spend
money
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to improve
transportation
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facilities in the village.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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