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describe piechart given about each language spoken by student in the university

Pie charts illustrate the number of
students
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 that were able to speak each
language
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--only French, only German, only
Spanish
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, another
language
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, no other
language
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 and two other languages-- at one university in the UK in 2000 and 2010. The figures are given in percentages. Overall, in both years
Spanish
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 was the wide spoken
language
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 for pupils;
moreover
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, German-speaking
students
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 remain in the same proportion.
First
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 of all,
students
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 who spoke only
Spanish
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, two other languages and another
language
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 were all 5 per
cent
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 increased in 2010.
Students
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 who only speak
Spanish
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 were the major
language
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 spoken by 35 per
cent
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,
therefore
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.
Students
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 tended to speak more other languages than those French,
Spanish
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 and German which result in a 5 per
cent
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 increase from the year 2000 to 20 per
cent
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 which was the
second
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 largest group in 2010.
Furthermore
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,in 2010
students
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 were more interested in speaking 2 languages which the amount increased from 10 per
cent
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 in 2000 to 15 per
cent
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.
On the other hand
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, in 2010, interest in speaking French decreased from 15 per
cent
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 to 10 per
cent
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.
Besides
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,
students
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 who can not speak any other
language
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 than English decreased by half from 20 per
cent
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 to 10 per
cent
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.

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