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It is generally believed that talent is something you are born with. some say it might even be genetic. However, there are those who claim that talent is a combination of exposure to a good teacher and practice. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Every human being has a
talent
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. A
Talent
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,
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 called gift means, to be very good in a certain field and describes a person who is talented is above average in fields
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sports,music or art. Despite
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the fact that many
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 that
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 genetic others believe
talent
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 is developed through hard work and practice.
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 essay will discuss both views and will provide a personal conclusion I will start with the
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 that
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 is something genetic. In my
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this
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 is surely true concerning talents which are the result of
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physical
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physical
 and mental traits. Taking the
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 sports as an example, one must agree that a person who is generally unsportive due to bad health or laziness is quite unlikely to develop
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talent
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the fact they practice hard.
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the fact there is no base is a
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forced
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 and might end up in a
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lack of confidence or even depression. A person
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 very fit and active from nature will only profit from hard work in order to develop and
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strengthen
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 their already existing talents.
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 could someone
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 is
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 a very strong runner start to apply for
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competitions
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 their talents discovered.
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 will not only help them to improve
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 have but to make something out of it and
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finally
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 profit from it. To conclude, In my
Opinion
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a
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Talent
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 is something one is born with as practice might help one to become better but the cherry on top can only be placed by
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genetic attributes.

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