In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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In a few regions of the United State , adolescents have no permission to go out at night after a particular
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. Unless they are with their parents or an adult . In my opinion, there are some reasons why I agree with
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rule. Namely, keep children away from criminals ,and prevent them from getting involved in illegal activities .
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, some drawbacks of the curfew will be discussed in the following essay . It can be seen that
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restriction is imposed in places where the rate of
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crimes is high.
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, curfew has some benefits for teenagers.
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, most criminals are out in the street at night and
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there is a threat of being attacked by robbers , kidnapped and other criminals ,
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it is better for them to be at home at
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, because teenagers are not mature enough to tell wrong from right , the danger of taking part in illegal activities between them is high , and after midnight is the golden
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for these kinds of activities. For
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reason,they must not be allowed to be outdoors after midnight .
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law has some disadvantages.
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, some industries may be damaged by the restriction of individuals commuting at
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, because the best
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for their businesses is at night .
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clubs , restaurants and other jobs related to entertainment may be affected.
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, the aim of these kinds of rules
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not to protect children and lawmakers want to reduce individual freedom and
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for secular countries like the US has negative impacts . In conclusion, despite all the benefits of curfew for youth , it had some disadvantages for other parts of society that should be observed in making laws .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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