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Some children found some subject eg mathematics and philosophy,… difficult so these subjects should be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
 consider that some abstract and complicated
subjects
such
 as mathematics and
philosophy
 are so hard to learn.
People
 who share
this
 view assert that these
subjects
 must be selective while others say that should be compulsory. Personally, I tend to support the opinion that these
subjects
 must be compulsory for all
students
 at the basic level not at the advanced level. On the one hand, it is considered why some
people
 think these
subjects
 are challenging and should be selective
instead
 of compulsory.
First
 of all, these
subjects
 require strong analytical and reasoning skills that a significant amount of degrees of us do not have.
Secondly
, if we look from a sentimental perspective, it is acceptable that maths and
philosophy
 cause lots of stress to
people
 who do not want to be interested in them.
On the other hand
, if these
subjects
 are taught using entertaining methods and related everyday life applications, the vast majority of
students
 will grasp the basics of
subjects
 and apply their everyday life.
Philosophy
also
 assists
students
 in discussing certain political and economic issues that each citizen has the ability to debate.
Likewise
, it is true that
philosophy
 and mathematics can enhance cognitive skills like concentration, perception, memory etc. which are crucial to
students
. All in all, while these
subjects
 have detrimental effects on
students
' school and personal life, these must be taught in an amusing way by equipped and gentle teachers since every human being must be able to think analytically in today's modern world.
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