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Some children found some subject eg mathematics and philosophy,… difficult so these subjects should be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

#children #eg #mathematics #philosophy #subjects
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Many
people
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 consider that some abstract and complicated
subjects
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such
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 as mathematics and
philosophy
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 are so hard to learn.
People
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 who share
this
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 view assert that these
subjects
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 must be selective while others say that should be compulsory. Personally, I tend to support the opinion that these
subjects
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 must be compulsory for all
students
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 at the basic level not at the advanced level. On the one hand, it is considered why some
people
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 think these
subjects
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 are challenging and should be selective
instead
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 of compulsory.
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 of all, these
subjects
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 require strong analytical and reasoning skills that a significant amount of degrees of us do not have.
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, if we look from a sentimental perspective, it is acceptable that maths and
philosophy
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 cause lots of stress to
people
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 who do not want to be interested in them.
On the other hand
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, if these
subjects
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 are taught using entertaining methods and related everyday life applications, the vast majority of
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 will grasp the basics of
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 and apply their everyday life.
Philosophy
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also
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 assists
students
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 in discussing certain political and economic issues that each citizen has the ability to debate.
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, it is true that
philosophy
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 and mathematics can enhance cognitive skills like concentration, perception, memory etc. which are crucial to
students
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. All in all, while these
subjects
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 have detrimental effects on
students
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' school and personal life, these must be taught in an amusing way by equipped and gentle teachers since every human being must be able to think analytically in today's modern world.
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