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There are some information about sales of Fairtrade-*labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

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 of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas changed a lot from 1999 to 2001 in 5 Europe developed countries. It is clear that the
UK
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 gradually dominated the
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 of both.Whereas for others,the
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 of coffee all experienced an increase in a varying range.But some countries dropped
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 the banana field. In the beginning,the market for coffee
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 was very small.The five countries,the
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,Switzerland,Denmark,Belgium and Sweden have 1.5,3,1.8,1 and 0.8 million euros respectively in 1999.After 5 years,the
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 in the
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 increased almost 13 times,to 20 million ,which is dramatic.In comparison,the minimum increase in Sweden with only 0.2 million. When it comes to bananas, the
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 still grow rapidly from 15 to 47 in the 5 years.Switzerland and Denmark
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 went up about 6 times in the
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 of bananas.While for the Belgium and Sweden.They decreased a little,from 1.8 to 1 and 2 to 0.9 respectively.
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