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In the future, all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think te advantages of driverless vechicles outweigh the disadvantages.?

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Owing to the rapidly developing technology, autonomous vehicles can be clearly possible in the
next
 generation to come which
make
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 any modes of transportation carrying just travellers. While there may be drawbacks
on
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 driverless
cars
, I am of the belief that the pros outweigh the cons of
such
 development. It is believed that the utilization of self-driving
cars
 would mean
to reduce
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 traffic congestion in the city. Unfortunately,
this
 would not be the case as people would be in a hurry to go to their destination and are not so happy to be driving long distances.
As a result
, they would opt to drive their own
cars
.
Thus
 contributing to
a
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slow pace
traffic
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especially
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 in the metropolis.
However
, the advantages, I support, would be much greater than the demerits. With the increase in automation, driverless
cars
 will reduce human errors on the road.
This
 is because of a specially designed algorithm that would follow a specific distance to be travelled by car.
Therefore
, the potential for unexpected collisions on roads would be preventable.
Furthermore
, autonomous
cars
 will have
a
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little effect on the environment as it's going to utilize and generate
its
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on
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 petrol from fossil
fuel
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.
Consequently
, a little less or no fumes at all will be emitted. In conclusion,
although
 there
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maybe
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 certain demerits, I believe somehow that the cons outweigh the Nu decreasing accidents on the roads and
a
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lesser pollution to the environment.
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