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Despite improvements in vehicle technology, there are still large numbers of road accidents. Explain some of the causes of these accidents and suggest some measures that could be taken to address the problem.

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There is a trend for
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 majority of emergency situations
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 the
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 in spite of developments in vehicle technology. The following essay takes a look at the main reasons
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 driveway crashes and
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 some possible solutions to avoid them.
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 of all, the factors responsible for
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 alarming incident vary. In some cases, it happens due to drunk driving, which means that people lose control while driving a car because of alcohol, drugs or other factors
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 can detrimentally affect
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the
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 organism.
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, in
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 3 people were dyed in a car collision,
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 one of the drivers was madly tipsy. On the national level, the obvious solution is to warn
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 regularly about the significance of sober-minded driving
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 social media and banners.
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, terrible external conditions may cause
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 accidents.
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, if you can not see anything around through the rainstorm, it would be arduous to drive properly. As an example, according to the statistics, more frightening incidents occur during bad weather. Responsible faces need to inform locals on time in relation to annual conditions and potential consequences of
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this
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 problem. One else issue behind
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negative driveway events is ignorance of traffic laws. Precisely, humans can get
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license
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 without total knowledge of rules, and
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, there are too many emergency things
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road
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. To exemplify, in Kazakhstan more than
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half of
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 bought their licenses in
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corrupt
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. The way forward should be the regulation
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 work of specific places and let people pass the exams by themselves, without any unbelievable circumstances. In conclusion,
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 car accident is a serious issue throughout both
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 and developed worlds, if the above steps
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 as common warning are taken, the situation will surely improve in the coming future.
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