Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinions

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think that being successful in life needs to work hard and be focused on goals, while others think that there are more important things

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as financial situation and how they look like. I am going to elaborate on both of these points of view and in the end, I will give my own opinion with relevant examples. To start with,

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is obvious that without working hard,

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could not achieve success easily. Meanwhile, the meaning of success is different to every single person in

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world. To explicate it, whenever an athlete joins a competition, the one and the only goal for him/her is to be a champion, which means success.

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is clear that everyone is making effort to become successful, athletes through physical activities, businessmen by devoting their time and money.

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, some individuals pay more attention to their appearance and rely more on money and they think these are more important.

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groups of

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think that money is the thing that all matters. To sum up, the

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attitude is very close to my opinion

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should face and experience all the hardships of life and

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they can achieve whatever they want and be successful and they will enjoy the consequences

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

216 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

perseverance
discipline
resilience
effort
tenacity
external factors
financial resources
favorable appearance
perceptions
advantages
intrinsic
extrinsic
sustainable
facilitating
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Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinions

Fully explain your ideas

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

What are the advantages and disadvantages while living in cities carry out them and give your opinion

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You missed an important meeting at work. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter: -apologize for not attending -explain why you did not attend -say what you will do to make up for it