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Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinions

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Some
people
 think that being successful in life needs to work hard and be focused on goals, while others think that there are more important things
such
 as financial situation and how they look like. I am going to elaborate on both of these points of view and in the end, I will give my own opinion with relevant examples. To start with,
this
 is obvious that without working hard,
people
 could not achieve success easily. Meanwhile, the meaning of success is different to every single person in
this
 world. To explicate it, whenever an athlete joins a competition, the one and the only goal for him/her is to be a champion, which means success.
In addition
,
this
 is clear that everyone is making effort to become successful, athletes through physical activities, businessmen by devoting their time and money.
On the other hand
, some individuals pay more attention to their appearance and rely more on money and they think these are more important.
Moreover
,
this
Correct determiner usage
these
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 groups of
people
 think that money is the thing that all matters. To sum up, the
first
 attitude is very close to my opinion
People
 should face and experience all the hardships of life and
then
 they can achieve whatever they want and be successful and they will enjoy the consequences
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • perseverance
  • discipline
  • resilience
  • effort
  • tenacity
  • external factors
  • financial resources
  • favorable appearance
  • perceptions
  • advantages
  • intrinsic
  • extrinsic
  • sustainable
  • facilitating
  • undeniable
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