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Some people think news has no connection to peoples live so it is a waste of time to read news in newspaper and watch news programme in television .To what extend do you agree or disagree

#people #news #connection #peoples #waste #time #newspaper #programme #television
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Nowadays, all over the world, we are hearing bad
news
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 these days. some
belief
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believe
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that information
which
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apply
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cast
from
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on
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news
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the news
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Add a missing verb
is no
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no
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not
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 related to
peoples
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people's
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 lives and destroyed our valuable
time
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 cause following
this
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news
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. In my view, it is important to manage our worth
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time
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of time
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 and ignore irrelevant
news
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.
Firstly
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, spending
time
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 on bad
news
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 can be a cause to interrupt our
time
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 work. On the one hand, we waste our moment
as
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by
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 following information
no
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with no
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 connection to us
instead
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 of following positive and important books which can enhance our knowledge and ability in work.
For instance
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,
last
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 year
i
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I
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 was keen to follow all the
news
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 related to Iran on the internet but I had to been studied my lesson so
unfortunately
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,unfortunately
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i
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I
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 couldn't pass my exam.in sum, we shouldn't allow wasting our
time
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 on bad
news
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.
Secondly
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, bad
news
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 can impact our souls. Unfortunately, all over the
earth
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,earth
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 we can observe disasters happening. We have been passed illness years and
then
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war
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the war
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 happened between Ukraine and
Russa
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Russia
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 which both carried the negative fluence on our mind. it can provide numerous
aspect
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aspects
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. For ,example it impacted increasing the number of divorces during these years.So we have to avoid following the yellow
news
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.
On the contrary
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, some people believe we have to know about events around us to prevent bad happening in future In conclusion, the bad
news
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 which has no connection to us can waste our
time
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 and turn us into the depression individual. I want to restate on opinion and take
you
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your
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 advice to abandon bad
news
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.
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