recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these dáy are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.
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Juvenile
crimes
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crime
crimes
can be punished under juvenile law. For short, juvenile crimes
are crime
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crimes
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committed
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by youngsters.
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people
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under the age of 18 which is the age when they can easily get influenced by Correct your spelling
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lifestyle
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, sometimes because the parents are overtired from overwork. Some parents never wanted kids and are cruelly trying to show the kids how they feel. Basically, because the parents usually feel that life is passing them by. Additionally
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and hopeless
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, your child is maturing and your relationship may be changing. Spend time doing everyday things together. The teenage years are exciting and enjoyable. Have fun - they'll soon be grown up. Let them know you will always be there for them. As teachers, it is essential to listen to students' concerns and demonstrate understanding as well as empathy. Offer your students the opportunity to have a one-to-one conversation with you to reconnect and discuss any concerns that might have arisen when their school was closed. If a child shares anything that is
particularly concerning, please follow the protection or child safeguarding systems in place.
In conclusion, parent
and teachers should pay more attention Fix the agreement mistake
parents
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their teenage so that they feel they are not alone and reduce to juvenile Change preposition
to
crimes
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