More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a morden life style which can not be treated with morden medicines. Some people think that a return to a traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extend to you agree?
It is an undeniable truth that health issues are drastically inclined in every country. Many societies opine that illness can be treated in traditional ways
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modern
morden
treatment. I disagree with Correct your spelling
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today
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affordable for the communities. Change the article
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Nevertheless
, I believe that new therapies are much better to get better health. Because they are much faster and convenient
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