More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a morden life style which can not be treated with morden medicines. Some people think that a return to a traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extend to you agree?

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It is an undeniable truth that health issues are drastically inclined in every country. Many societies opine that illness can be treated in traditional ways

instead

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morden

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treatment. I disagree with

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numerous unknown

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. Effects can

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through spiritual therapies. Because people do not have much knowledge and information about herbal

medicines

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illness getting worse. Another concrete cause is that

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morden

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by doctors.

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can give proper guidance and instructions about medicine.

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they instruct

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in a proper amount.

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medicine can give a faster relief as compared

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the

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homemade remedies. According to the surveillance,

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treatment due to faster and

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effect

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medicines

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new technological devices and

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can alleviate their problem in

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comfortable and

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efficient ways.

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surgery.

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. .

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, the person can complete surgery without any pain.

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traditional remedies are

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affordable for the communities.

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poor people.

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not have to go

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, I restate my opinion that both ways are profitable.

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humankind.

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