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Some people think students can evaluate their teachers while others think it may have some bad effects discuss. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #students #teachers #effects
Recently, it is undeniable that with the progress of education,
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 it. So that an escalating category of people, nowadays,
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a belief that
students
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teachers
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egalitarian ideas. I completely agree with
this
 notion, because I think
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 is a result of
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modern society and can bring benefits
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 both
students
 and
teachers
.
To begin
 with, it is widely known that in the traditional
class
,
students
 are forbidden to give some
evaluation
 opinions much less
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 against their
teachers
. There are benefits to
this
 concept but just played a role in the ancient time when the educational level was very low, a teacher had to manage a large group of
students
 so it was useful for them to implement some restrictive measures.
However
, in modern society, more and more schools are trying to practice an idea called elite education which means fewer
students
 are supposed to attend
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one
class
.
Therefore
,
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educational pattern, the conventional relationship between
students
 and
teachers
 is no longer applicable to
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modern society.
By contrast
, the evaluating mechanism is adapted to
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this
 new trend.
Furthermore
, allowing
students
 to evaluate their
teachers
 can bring lots of advantages. To illustrate
this
, in some classes, there is a possibility that
teachers
 will make some mistakes
such
 as answering the phone in
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class
 or being late for
class
 and most of them seldom realize they are wrong. So it is important for
students
 to point out these errors through the
evaluation
 system. It can not only help
teachers
 to correct their mistakes but
also
 can make
students
to
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have a better
class
 environment which is definitely helpful for their
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.
Moreover
, daring to oppose authority can
also
 exercise
students
' critical thinking.
Thus
, it is necessary to establish a perfect
evaluation
 mechanism. In conclusion, after
this
 essay has manifested the above-mentioned points, I can reiterate that I believe that
students
 should be allowed to evaluate their
teachers
. As not only is adapted to the development of education, but it
also
 brings advantages to both
students
 and
teachers
.
Hence
, I argue that schools should improve the
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 system and encourage
students
 to point out their
teachers
’ mistakes.
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