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Some people are happy to stay in the same area for their whole life, while others prefer living in many different places. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #area #life #places
In
this
 world, there
are
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 mostly two
type
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types
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 of
people
 living, some of them love to live in
same
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the same
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place
 for their entire existence. On the other side, many
people
 are completely opposite, they like to live in different
places
.
This
 essay will discuss both
type
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types
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 of
people
's
point
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points
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 of view.
To begin
 with, the main reason
people
 live in
same
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the same
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place
because
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is because
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 of homesickness and attachment with their family and friends, who lives in
same
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the same
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 area,
In other words
, they do not want to go out of their comfort zone.
For example
, many
people
 live in the same house where they
was
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 born and they never want to
move
 any other
places
 and leave their friends and comfort area. While
in contrast
, many
people
move
 to different
places
 many
time
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times
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 in their life, because they do not feel homesick and they like to live and explore different
life
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lifestyle
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style
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styles
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 and
culture
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cultures
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.
In addition
, many
people
also
 like to
experience
different
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the different
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climate
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climates
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 and
some time
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sometimes
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 they
move
 for better job opportunities. For
instant
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an instant
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, Many
people
move
 to cold
places
 if they like cold or areas
from
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where
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the beach
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beach
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beaches
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 are near
also
 many
people
 switch
the
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cities to get
higher
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a higher
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 salary and many other benefits. In my opinion, One should live
at
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in
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 different
places
 and should
experience
 different
culture
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cultures
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 and
beauty
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the beauty
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 of nature, if
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someone
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some one
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someone
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 just
say
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at
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in
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 one
place
then
 they will never
able
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be able
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 to
experience
this
 and live like a frog in a well. To conclude, Many
people
 prefer to live
at
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in
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same
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the same
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place
 for
different
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a different
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reason
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reasons
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 and
not
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do not
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 want to go out of the box, while, some
people
 want to live
at
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in
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 many different
places
 and love to
experience
different
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a different
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culture
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cultures
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,
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 and nature and some time for better opportunities
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