Nowadays many teenagers choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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modern era, most
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teenagers
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the teenagers
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decide to be self-
emplyed
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employed
, more than to be
a
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employee to get a job from companies or organizations.
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, not one willing to be a worker in whole life in
this
generation and trying to be rich if there is any chance. There were many cases
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that
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self-
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employed
is better than
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salary
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a salary
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form
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the company,
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some people sold fashing closing
in
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social media who brought that from Korea and sold in Hong Kong to
made
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the
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profit. And that can cover her cost and get more money than her job. After that, more and more people are doing what she did to try to free up themself as no need to trap in the
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workplace
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work place
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.
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, It is difficult
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money in position turnover when the desire of
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consumption
of buying is reduced. As being
a
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employee no need to worry about that as long as they
are keep
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working and do not get fired.
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, they might need to spend a lot of time in their own business for anything they need to take care of. So, they do not have more time to stay or
gethering
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gathering
with their family or friends,
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especially
espcially
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especially
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the festival. In conclusion, being self-
emplyed
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employed
has pros and cons which
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on how you think. Somebody might think it is worthy but somebody might disagree with that. It could help people get rich before they get older but
business
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also
come
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with risk which
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not know when you have to face
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  • self-employed
  • gig economy
  • entrepreneurship
  • work-life balance
  • autonomy
  • job security
  • benefits
  • health insurance
  • retirement plans
  • income
  • financial management
  • marketing
  • networking
  • customer service
  • inexperienced
  • isolation
  • camaraderie
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