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University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some people think universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjects in addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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people
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 what they want. Some
people
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 more subject. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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people
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. University times not only spend time on learning but
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 social life. When they can choose different subjects, they can meet different
people
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 spend some time
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 their relationship with
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other
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 which is very important before
people
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. When they are working, more friends are very useful.
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 on
one
 subject
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can allow
people
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knowledge
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the student
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student
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 their working life after they work.
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Furthermore
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, we need to get more
knowledge
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 the world. There are more and more
company
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 need their employee to know more
knowledge
. When
people
 learn more, they will easy to find jobs If children want to learn
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, they can learn by themselves. There are
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 many students
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 handle more than
one
 subject. So I think we can allow students to find what they want to learn.
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