Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

It is common in many countries to teach a secondary
language
at a primary school and many parents start raising bilingual children in some modern families.
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. Learning a new
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has scientifically proven advantages of improving
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brain
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misbelief is just a conjecture with no valid claims. Introducing a
language
during the developing stage of a
child
had many prominent advantages physically and mentally. The skill to catch words and
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them is an inherent ability in an infant's
brain
and
therefore
it is more straightforward for a
child
to learn a new
language
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an adult while the
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is not functioning efficiently. Many scientists
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claim that a
child
who has learnt bilingually at his primary school is likely to have more creativity and
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skills.
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, in a bilingually raised household, the children tend to have chances to learn different cultures and
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than others. Having said these scientific findings, many elders in most families hold a superstition that teaching
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a
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language
will ruin the national
language
and make the
child
more confused.
Although
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misbelief is strong in some countries, there is no valid reason for that. Despite
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some parents think those bilingual kids will struggle while communicating with other peers, it is found
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that those kids have
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probability of being leaders or top students in many primary schools and kindergartens. To conclude, teaching more than a mother
language
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positive effects on the
child
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brain
by improving cognitive skills, whereas the only drawback that some people claim is only misunderstanding the science.
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  • Cognitive development
  • Enhance
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Pronunciation
  • Mimic
  • Native-like accent
  • Cultural awareness
  • Sensitivity
  • Exposure
  • Resource allocation
  • Qualified
  • Effective instruction
  • Overwhelmed
  • Curriculum
  • Undermining
  • Mother tongue
  • Prioritizing
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