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Nowadays a lot of buildings, such as offices and schools, are now being built with an open plan design. Why is that? Do you see this as a positive or negative development?

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In the modern world, interior
design
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well-discussed
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topic
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 and
citizens
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perspective
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 have changed
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.
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, most
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buildings
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the buildings
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built
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 with an open
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design
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. In my
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 it would be positive for social communication.
This
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. Nowadays, due to
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 down of communication, architectures prefer
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planning
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 offices and schools in open
plan
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design
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 it leads to people
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 around and
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a connection
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connection
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 with each other. An example can be seen as google offices which
built
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 with
open
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plan
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design
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, it improved
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inter personal
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 skills. The other fact would be visual beauty which is so imperative all around the world. According to interior
design
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basics
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 the open
plan
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design
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 is more effective than other designs which
plan
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 separately.
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, those
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design
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 have more fans than others. It seems, the open
plan
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design
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 spreads good vibes and contributes
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 development apparently, it is clear
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 with old designed buildings and schools which were separately and students could not catch up with other classes and ages, so it leads to breaking down of communication.
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, the open
plan
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design
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not
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 privacy for some important sections.
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, in offices for financial
sections
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 people need high security and privacy. All in all, I suppose there are more benefits than disadvantages
of
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 these designs. In conclusion,
between
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 interior
design
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types
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 the open
plan
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 become popular due to major facts. And it is a superb development in the modern world.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Open plan design
  • Collaboration
  • Cost-effective
  • Creative problem-solving
  • Flexible use of space
  • Reconfigured
  • Operational expenses
  • Noise levels
  • Distractions
  • Productivity
  • Privacy
  • Personal space
  • Adaptable
  • Mental well-being
  • Construction costs
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