Nowadays a lot of buildings, such as offices and schools, are now being built with an open plan design. Why is that? Do you see this as a positive or negative development?
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design
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citizens
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perspectives
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buildings
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the buildings
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been built
plan
design
. In my eyes
it would be positive for social communication. Add a comma
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design
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a connection
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were built
open
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an open
plan
design
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inter-personal
inter personal
skills. The other fact would be visual beauty which is so imperative all around the world. According to interior Correct your spelling
interpersonal
design
basics
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plan
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is more effective than other designs which plan
separately. In addition
, those design
have more fans than others.
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with old designed buildings and schools which were separately and students could not catch up with other classes and ages, so it leads to breaking down of communication. Wrong verb form
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However
, the open plan
design
has not
privacy for some important sections. Correct your spelling
no
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, in offices for financial sections
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these designs.
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become popular due to major facts. And it is a superb development in the modern world.Submitted by TUTOO on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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