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Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Planting
trees
 and plant is prominent for
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the
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 environment and global warming as it gives fresh air to breathe.But few people have problems in growing
trees
 as it reduces accommodation facilities for them. To
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 major extent, I disagree that in
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 of human habitat more
trees
 should not be grown. There are many reasons to defend my notion.
First
 and foremost, Abode provision will reduce and a large population will become abandoned without food and shelter. People have to migrate
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 cities for residents and lodgings.
Moreover
, due to a lack of job opportunities crime, and theft will increase and the
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economy of the country will fall drastically. Another disadvantage is that slum areas will rise and there will be no hygiene and the vast community will deprive of joy. Child labour will rise, the rent and taxes price would be extremely high strikes and riots of public will surge and these people will face huge trouble. On the flip side, growing
trees
 and plants have tremendous benefits pollution will reduce and cities would get fresh air to inhale. There will be a decrease in the extinction of species, Ecosystem will be properly balanced. Major
trees
 will provide fruits so there will be no shortage of food. To conclude, Plant and
trees
 are essential for nature but they should be planted more in the suburbs of the city so that there is enough space for constructing houses and buildings in cities area. greenery is
also
 vital for survival so government and individuals should plant maximum
trees
 in their surroundings. I
also
 insist everyone
to
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protect our environment in the best possible way.
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