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The fil is less important from af art and literature.To what extent do you agree?

#fil #af #art #literature
It is a broad opinion that
films
 are a notch below the most common forms of
art
 and literature
such
 as paintings or books.I strongly disagree.I believe that
films
 have the same artistic
value
 as both writing and drawing.
Films
,today, are the most popular
form
 of
art
.What I believe is the most important part of
films
 is the access that we all have to them and how they belong to
people
.It may be the cinemas,online streaming networks or even DVDs,though they're out of date,they're still more accessible to the public in general.
People
 rush to get tickets.
People
 celebrate the birth of new
films
 by their favourite stars and somehow feel like they belong to them.Film critics are everywhere, you do not need a certain
value
 or social status to talk about a film.
Films
 belonging to the
people
.
Furthermore
,
films
 are relatable.
Films
also
 give out social messages that make us aware of what's happening around us.They talk about topics that are taboo.Topics are not easily said out loud by any other
art
form
 or by themselves,yet
films
 portray them beautifully helping us understand the unsaid problems. I do not think gay pride or castle discrimination would have been a very commonly spoken topic nowadays if not for
films
.
However
, I do realise that
films
 have deviated
people
 from reading books or visiting
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.I do know that history, traditional or cultural artforms are diminishing.But I
also
 think as technology grows,we should embrace it and be more accepting of the fact that newer technologies or
art
 forms
such
 as
films
 have a lot of
value
 too. To sum up,I strongly believe that
films
 are no less in
value
 than any other kind of
art
form
.They are more accessible,relatable and belong to the
people
 more than any other
art
form
.
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