City living in the 21st century is stressful and offers no advantage. To what extent do you agree or disagree to this statement.

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everything's moving fast. Especially in our lifetime, we're living in the age of technological transformation. We're so copped by the advance of the technologies that it

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changes the way we live and work. From computers to smartphones. And that

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of advancement

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shown especially in big

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are surely more adaptable

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of technology because

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is where the businesses

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taking place. When you prefer living there, more likely that's where you

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make your living. And there's no doubt that all the businesses

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taking advantage of

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in big

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and other social media

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to connect with each other even when they are located in the same building because it is proven that's faster because you don't have to move and

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by walking to the location of the person you want to connect with. And companies

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encourage or even expect their employee to

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way of working. Because it means that their employee will have more

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to work on other important things that

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. After all, that

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being normalized in

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century and they will call it

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efficient

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and effective. But in smaller

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people

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are tend

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to connect with

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face to face rather than

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of technology. That's why the

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in smaller

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more relaxed. In

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and being expected from the employer will definitely keeping

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physically and mentally. You'll be expected

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and

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faster and more efficient in every

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of your work. And you'll find yourself not able to enjoy the simplest things called

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. Because employers

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more of your

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to be used for their

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

306 words

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