Some people think that children should learn world history. Others believe that it is more important to learn the history of their own country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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History
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is one of the foundation subjects in every school in any
country
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. It has been an ongoing discussion,
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about whether
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to teach children more about what happened in the past all over the
world
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or focus on the
history
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of the
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students live in. I believe that it is equally important to learn about both the
history
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of
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the world
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and the homeland. Those who suggest that
world
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history
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is more valuable have a point. It is general knowledge to remember the discovery of America or why, how, and when was European Union established.
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, it should be part of the principal education because understanding
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significant moments in
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world`s
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the world`s
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history
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offers students details about different cultures, religions, traditions as well as foreign languages.
Such
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understanding can
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help people while working or travelling anywhere in the
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as they might encounter citizens of various countries.
Although
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, I think that those who learn
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history
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can benefit in the long-term,
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the
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of own
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cannot be ignored. The local
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is a pivotal phenomenon
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getting familiar with the surrounding.
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, it is a natural process to learn about the motherland and its
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for many. British pupils,
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, are introduced to critical past events,
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as how Britain achieved their independence and a dominant position in the
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economy.
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way, youth will gain respect as well as
admiration
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the admiration
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of
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for
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invaluable
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the invaluable
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assets and freedom Britain have thanks to those who fought for
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country
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. I am convinced that the
history
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about
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of
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the motherland should be taught at school as
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school-aged
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school aged
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school-aged
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children are provided with
a detailed information
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detailed information
a piece of detailed information
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about their own
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, culture and customs which is a piece of a bigger picture called
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world
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the world
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. To conclude, I believe that educating people about
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world
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history
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is as crucial as teaching them about how their native
country
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was established and developed. While general knowledge about
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world`s
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historical moments can help people during their travels abroad, the knowledge of local
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makes students cherish and
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be proud of their
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and its key figures from the past.
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