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You use the local swimming pool often and during one of your visits you encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager and say

#pool #visits #manager
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to express my dissatisfaction
on
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 using a swimming
pool
 as I am
regular
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 visitor
in
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 your
water
pool
.
Firstly
, I am Rohit and I had enrolled
your
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 swimming
pool
 for learning. The issue has occurred in the afternoon of
day
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 before yesterday
which
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 was
water
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pool
 saw uncleaned and found fungus on the
water
 area.
In addition
 to that, there some other problem which
water
 had smelling owing to that some people left from
pool
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the pool
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.
However
, I did
compliant
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to
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 the employee but he ignored and nothing was changed. He went inside and
not
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 done any action for changing
water
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the water
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 and
cleaning
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tank
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 for customer satisfaction. After
while
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 I saw every
think
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 as it is.
Thus
, decided to write
letter
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 to you and inform your property
managing
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 condition.
Lastly
, requesting you to do necessary action on the same
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think
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 as well as hire a vendor for
water
pool
 cleaning and change
water
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 twice or
trice
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twice
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 a week so it will not smell. Looking for
positive
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a positive
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 response from your end. Yours faithfully, Rohit
Markad
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Marked
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