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Some people claim that immigrants should adopt the local culture when immigrating to a new country. While others think that they can establish a minority community instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is thought that
people
 who move to a new country should follow the
customs
 of the new place .But others say
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 it is better that immigrants keep
their
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customs
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 country. I agree with adopting in
new
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culture
. In
this
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approach
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 and
then
 expose my reasons. Some
people
 who argue that immigrants should absorb
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the national
culture
 of
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 host believe that
firstly
, one of the main
problem
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 for newcomers is finding a new job.
Therefore
, if they learn many
of
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common
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 from native
people
, more job opportunities will be introduced to them, and they can have
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relationship
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 with employers and customers.
In addition
, absorbing
in
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customs
 can decrease the cultural dispute between different ethnic groups.
As a result
,
instead
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of
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argument
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 about differences
of
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 their
culture
, they can focus on their job and education. On the other
hands
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, other
people
 think that newcomers should form specific communities in order to
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 of traditional
culture
 and national language. Because
,
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 they insist that adopting in local
culture
 can threaten
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 tongue.
Therefore
. It is possible that new generations will
forgot
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 their ancestral traditions.
Moreover
,
customs
 and cultures
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paly
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 mail role in providing an inheritance for
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generation
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.
For example
, there are some temples in Canada where many
of
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immigrants gather and perform their traditions. To sum up briefly,
although
 many
of
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newcomers encounter
with
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culture
 shock and prefer to have a
center
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 of nationality ,many of them are interested in absorbing
by
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native
people
 and learn every
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 rapidly .I think that those who accept all
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 of
new
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 society will be more successful than others.
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