Some people think that finding a job satisfaction is considered the most important thing for the young generation nowadays. Do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint?

The charts illustrate the destination of UK students, who didn’t find permanent jobs after graduation. The
first
one is for graduates and the
second
for postgraduates in 2008. Overall, from the trend of the chart, most graduate and post-graduate graduate students went for
further
study in 2008.
on the other hand
, only a small number of admission did voluntary tasks in both groups after leaving college. And the ones who decided to take part-time work is greater than those who didn’t find jobs. it’s
also
clear that the number of graduate students without full-time work less than post graduated. The
first
chart gives information that the early destination for the former group to go for
further
studies by a recorded total of 29,666 in the mentioned year. Followed by no full-time job with a sum of 17,735. In the
third
place comes the rate of unemployed at 16,235.
finally
, 3,500 of them sought unpaid effort. The
second
chart for the other group, with the same order as the previous. 2,725 OF the admission continue with advanced studies. While 2,531 took part-time jobs and among those who didn’t occupy any work were 1,625.
Lastly
, 345 of
this
group become volunteers.
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