Some people think that finding a job satisfaction is considered the most important thing for the young generation nowadays. Do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint?

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the
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holidays
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accommodation chosen by
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people
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people
who live in United
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Kingdom
in 2010.
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for spending
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holidays
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the four countries (
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Scotland
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Wales
and
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Northern
Irland. Whilst, self-catering comes in the
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place after hotels. And which are considered as the less
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popular
accommodation are caravans and camping. Hotels,
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high turnout by British. it's over 50% in each of
England
and
Scotland
whereas around 45% in
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Wales
and Ireland.
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the
second
higher rate for self-catering is 30%
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Scotland
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by
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and
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which is about 27%. With
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to
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the remaining accommodation, Caravans are more popular in Ireland, where
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reached 30%. while it's less popular in other
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cities
citizen
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. it's obvious that
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percentage 5%
then
this
rate slightly increased in
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and Irland just above 10%. While
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it
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the highest point at
Walas
by rate nearly to 14%.
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