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Many countries are experiencing serious problems with their environment, with pollution of their land, water and air. What are these problems and how might they be reduced?

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Environment
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The environment
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 is a gift from god. Many nations are facing tremendous issues with their surroundings, with water
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,
air
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pollution
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 and noise
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. These problems are associated with people’s regular usage of home appliances, allowing wastewater to mix in
sea
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the sea
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 and horning while driving but there are solutions to overcome
this
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 social responsibilities and implementing rigid protocols by the government. Many companies are using advertisements as a medium to portray their products. The options used to showcase the good are inappropriate for society. I strongly believe that content delivery must be reliable,should use disclaimers and avoid marketing in
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 way that attracts children. The theme of advertisements should be trustable. There are
much
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 displays about the content which are unrealistic and they display more offers during the promotion of the product. The theme of advertisements should be trustable. There are many displays about the content which are unrealistic, and they display more offers during the promotion of products. The major reason for the
air
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pollution
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 is the usage of home appliances like
air
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 conditioners and fridges. There is enormous heat produced out of it which affects the environment and increases the global temperature.
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, our
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 conditioner generates more heat and causes the ozone layer hole to expand more.
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 can be controlled by people and using their product depending on their requirements.
Air
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pollution
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 increasing a lot in today’s environment, and it is our responsibility to control it. Marriage is an event and it is special for everyone in today's society. Few people believe that
life
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 must be engaged with love once.
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, some people feel we should marry for money. In my opinion, money makes
life
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 more comfortable than affection. Certainly, love plays a vital role to lead a peaceful
life
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. It helps us understand each other as well as promotes our lives without a major quarrel.
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A person
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 with more money provides a glamorous and hi-fi
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 as well as
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helps
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their children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecosystem
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • emissions
  • deforestation
  • conservation
  • biodiversity
  • regulatory standards
  • composting
  • urban sprawl
  • green technologies
  • environmental degradation
  • waste management
  • pollutants
  • non-biodegradable
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