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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are some who think medics and engineering professionals must be obligated to
work
 in the country where they studied, other people believe they should
work
 where they want even abroad. In my opinion, I agree that a balance between two options will benefit professional and their
countries
. On the one hand, professionals who
work
 where they studied may help to increase local development. Currently, in many
countries
 like Chile, there are scholarships to pay
their
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 studies but after finishing their studies, graduates have to return the state aid working in a public system
especially
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 in poor places which
permit
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 them to develop a project that improves the quality of life of isolated towns contributing to local communities.
On the other hand
, it is often thought to have a free choice where working even abroad is better for professional growth. When graduates begin to
work
 is very important to create a contact net with people from other
countries
 as a benefit to get knowledge in their fields and could be an opportunity to get good jobs.
Furthermore
, the researches need
different
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 viewpoint,
thus
, working abroad could increase the quality of these.
Finally
, in my view, both options are indispensable for our society, but, the focus should depend on the professional field and the scholarship they got to contribute to the state.
For instance
, in some
countries
 graduates may choice
work
 abroad but are indispensable to help where they studied, they can be
a researchers
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 but their aid needs to be related to a problem of their
countries
. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe it would be better a balance between a free choice of the place to
work
 and getting a job where they studied as it will benefit both personal and
society
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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