you are not satisfied with the changing rooms in the sports center that you visit .write a letter to the manager. what the problem is how feel about the problem what steps you want the manager to take

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Dear Sir or Madam, I'm writing to inform you that shower space are small and lacked locker

room

thechanging

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the changing

rooms. I am a

membership

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member

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this

sports

center

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centre

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for a year and I recently found out that the number of lockers

are

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insufficient in the changing

room

during the weekends.

Also

, the shower space

are

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really

crowed

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crowded

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. I felt not satisfied with

this

situation when I have my

lesure

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leisure

time to work out a bit after my work. I believe that I am not the only one

felt

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who felt

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disappoint

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disappointed

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about the changing

room

. I suggest that changing

room

should

be expand

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be expanded

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in the

few weeks or early

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apply

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this

week.

Furthermore

membership

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members

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should own their

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unique

unqiue

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unique

locker in the sports

center

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centre

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in order to save more time for exercise. Thank you for giving the matter your attention.

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Yours

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Your

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Yours

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faithfully, Jack

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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142 words

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you are not satisfied with the changing rooms in the sports center that you visit .write a letter to the manager. what the problem is how feel about the problem what steps you want the manager to take

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

As a result of electronic invention such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent so you agree or disagree?

The advance in air travel are focused only in first-class and this seems to have left others with no benefits at all. Do you agree or disagree?

As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You are employed full-time and also doing a part-time evening course. You are not able to continue the course. Write a letter to the course lecturer. In the letter • explain why you cannot continue the course • describe the situation • say what you will be doing about it

Youth unemployment is increasing in many countries in the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures can be taken to solve it?