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Advertisements have impacted our modern world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of advertisements.

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wich
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 has played a vital role in
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product
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;
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, it is believed by a few masses that marketing
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adverse effects on our society.
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its drawbacks
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 of
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it but
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benefits
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the benefits
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 of broadcasting. To commence with, there are several reasons which support
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 idea, perhaps the prominent one is " provide proper
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" To elaborate
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, since numerous
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product
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products
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available
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 in the market, it
help
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 to select
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the right
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 one via printing the
information
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, many business
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 sold cheap
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product
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, but
with
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the
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apply
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advertisement
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advertisements
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 help to people get aware
about
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 bout original item.
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, in
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India
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Indian
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 it is
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mandatory
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description
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 with
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information
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 the reason Indian citizens never get
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 of fake
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product
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.
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, it is proved that adds' it is beneficial during purchase item from
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. On the flip side, despite having
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benefited
benifited
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benefitted
 from broadcasting, it is drawbacks cannot be neglected. " create financial burden" if mankind solely watching
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advertisement
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 and reliance on it, ameliorates the chance of falling in financial trouble because these things
leads
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 to over purchasing.
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, "The Times Of India" newspaper reveals that majority of The Americans face financial difficulties due
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 purchasing.
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advertisement
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 affects on
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 financial budget, when they solely depend on marketing. To conclude,
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 broadcasting help to gain
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 about several
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products
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product
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 while buying, it will harm human financially if they continuously follow it
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 their daily life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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