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Countries with long working days are more successful economically, but there are some negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary world, a debate has been observed surfacing around where few people opine that the nations which have a long duration of working hours are blooming in economic terms, but they do certainly suffer socially. I personally agree with the above statement. The protagonist to
this
 believes that, in order to achieve their work targets, humans spend
majority
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 of
time
 in the office, which leads to hardly any
time
 left for socializing. To exemplify, a recent survey performed by a reputed organisation in the USA states that, individuals hired by multinational companies are working Monday to Saturday to make their
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 meet and leaving Sunday for their personal
time
, which is consumed by taking rest.
As a result
, they are growing in economic terms but there is no
time
 for their social
life
. To
further
 support my opinion, due to long hours spent in the office, their personal
life
 suffers. They hardly have any
time
 to be with their family
thus
, leading to more conflicts in their married
life
 contributing to
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 an outset, they are more stressed which
moreover
 limits them in interacting with other people. To encapsulate, I reiterate that, it is needless to say that working for long durations certainly results in rising their GDP which helps the country to flourish economically but it definitely takes a toll
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 their personal
life
 which
further
 contributes to mental stress
thus
 limiting their social interaction with other people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • correlation
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • detrimental
  • stress levels
  • strain
  • work-life balance
  • emerging economies
  • unsustainable growth
  • social unrest
  • productivity tools
  • government policies
  • social well-being
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