Some people say that it is necessary to possess talent to become a successful sportsperson. Others, however, believe that hard work and practice are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The given bar
chart
illustrates the number of men and
women
who attended several courses in the year 2009 at an adult education centre. The pie
chart
gives data about the ages of the participants.
also
, both the bar
chart
and pie
chart
are based on a survey. Overall, most
women
attended the language
course
, as you can see in the two charts majority of the
attendance
of courses goes to
women
. While only a minority of men attended various courses compared to
women
. The most attended
course
for both genders is language.
However
,
women
took over the
attendance
by 40 females. Whereas, 20 males only attended the
course
. As for the painting is the
second
most attended
course
the numbers are close to each other. The sculpture is the relatively smallest attended
course
by approximately 15
attendance
for both genders. For the pie
chart
, most of the ages are 50 or over 42 per cent. As for the
second
, by 26 per cent and 40-49 ages of
attendance
people.
then
comes the mid-age people 30-39 by 16 per cent
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural talent
  • competitive advantage
  • innate ability
  • intuitive understanding
  • perform under pressure
  • early recognition
  • enhance skills
  • hone skills
  • rigorous training
  • dedication
  • perseverance
  • strong work ethic
  • relentless effort
  • consistent practice
  • long-term success
  • continuous improvement
  • resilience
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