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People have different job expectations for jobs. Some people prefer to do the same job for the same company, whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Write about the advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint?

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Opinions diverge widely on the advantages of various job expectations for
jobs
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. Many people these days assume that applying for a permanent occupation for the same company is the most effective way to secure a stable life, while many others are more inclined to change
jobs
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 frequently. In the following essay, I will examine the claim from both points of view, and
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 give my own take on
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 matter. On the
one
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 hand, there is a large number of employees
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 decided to undertake just
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 specific task
,
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 and work for just
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 company. As a consequence, they might spend most of their time being
an experts
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of
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 their particular fields when they can gain in-depth knowledge and practical experience
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 their industries, thereby insuring
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 salary and social position.
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, they would not have
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 function, which
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 they are unable to accomplish other
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sufficient
sufficent
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sufficient
 tasks.
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, to be a good seller, apart from the ability to attract potential customers, you
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 need to perform well
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 time and money management.
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 the other hand, many others prefer to change
jobs
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 regularly. There are some certain advantages
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.
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, not only do they equip with
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 understanding of all industries, but
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 be equipped with exclusive skills
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 as communication and teamwork
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, it will give them invaluable perspective from all aspects of life.
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, their career paths could have more promotions and high-paid
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 thanks to their efforts.
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, they are more likely to face various risks and have to invest more time than others, which sometimes can damage their whole life. In conclusion, I would say that the merits of doing temporary tasks outweigh the
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demerits
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 is due to the fact that people who put a lot of
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 to do something would definitely achieve relative
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successes
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sucesses
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success
.
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