A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discus both views and give your opinion

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Animal exploitation has recently become
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controversial issue as many individuals believe that animal
right
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rights
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should be preserved while opponents argue that human
being
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beings
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have no choice
to
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but to
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take advantage of what
animals
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provide for
our
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mankind
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survival. On the one hand, it is said that employing these creatures
are
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in our genes. We evolve in a way that our ancestors have fed
of
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livestock and it took million years to reach
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the
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point
of
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in
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time
and
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it is
therefore
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printed in our DNA which takes
shape
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the
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structure of our body cells. It is hard to alter
this
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kind of diet which is harmful
for
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our living
organism
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organisms
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.
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,
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achieved
the
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brilliant discoveries for meat, milk and other product alternatives.
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, they are in
early
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stages of making protein in
laboratory
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without
stroll
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the life of
animals
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. Unfortunately,
these
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amount
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amounts
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of
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have
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not been enough to meet the
population ‘
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population's
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needs of the planet Earth.
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, the opponents argue that any living creatures should be respected and we should make a space for them. It is true that
animals
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are not as wise as us and they don’t have
power
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to defend themselves, it should not be a good excuse to exploit them. They can suffer like
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a human
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human
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humans
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with
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without
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any
harms
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harm
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we have witnessed many scenes in documentaries that how chimpanzees behave like
human
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humans
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and how clever they are and how they interact and how the affected by cruel
behavior
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behaviour
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of trafficking. In summary, we should respect
animals
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as far as we can, and look for
substitutes
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substitute
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approaches that help us
less
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fewer
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harm
animals
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.
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