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To be labelled a ‘Work of Art’, a painting, sculpture or other art form should display certain qualities that are unique. However, over the past century there has been a decline in the quality of prize-winning artwork and it is now possible for quite ordinary pieces of art to be labelled ‘masterpieces ’ whilst true works of art pass unnoticed. Do you agree or disagree?

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The graph illustrates a variety of in-house training courses learned by the manager and secretary. While the pie chart compares the portion of training hours in different classes in a large financial company. It is obvious that the overall training hours in online classes spend half of the time on technical, whereas the class
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 health and safety demonstrate the least part in the pie chart.
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compares the score of online training classes between managers and secretaries. It is clear that both of the managers and secretaries are recognized the courses are important for the job, stood at over 70%.
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