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Young people today mostly learn by reading books or watching movies, rather than real-life experiences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Arguably, the methods which youngsters use to acquire knowledge have changed dramatically in recent years. It seems that nowadays, the majority of younger individuals often rely on sources of information including
books
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 or movies, rather than their actual life
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. In my opinion,
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 a myriad of factors that contribute to the growth of
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 approach to learning.
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 of all,
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 trend may stem from the drastic change in the educational system throughout the years. Specifically, education facilities have evidently become more and more concentrated on academic results. As a consequence, these institutions require their students to read a myriad of
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 with the aim of enhancing
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 knowledge
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 a variety of subjects and fields.
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, the preference of younger individuals themselves may contribute to
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 phenomenon as well. According to recent studies, learning from
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 and films can be surprisingly and considerably efficacious, owing to the fact that
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 method of studying can be extremely entertaining and able to attract the attention of youngsters. As
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, it is not difficult to understand why younger learners are more inclined to study by adapting
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 approach in comparison to wandering tediously outside in order to thoroughly research a subject. In conclusion, it is an undeniable fact that the younger generation
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 become dependent on
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 or movies as a provider of info because of the development of educational systems as well as the
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 own predilection.
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