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In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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Owing thanks to the rapid development of technology, agriculture has made noteworthy
advancement
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 over the years. Despite that fact, there still exists the phenomenon of people suffering from malnourishment.
This
 essay will thoroughly discuss various explanations and provide a number of appropriate solutions to the problem. Interestingly, there
are
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 a myriad of factors that contribute to the ongoing famine happening all across the globe.
First
 of all, the most vulnerable target of
this
 trend appears to be citizens of undeveloped countries, presumably due to the fact that those nations lack the funds to develop their
food
 industry. As a consequence, shortages of necessities occur daily, resulting in mass starvation.
Furthermore
, there are parts of the world where the climate is essentially unsuitable for agriculture.
For instance
, deserts are evident to be excessively dry for crops to grow, which can be detrimental
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 the
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 quantity of
food
. Fortunately, a multitude of practical approaches can be adapted in order to tackle
this
 particular predicament.
Firstly
, developed countries should contribute an adequate amount of money to reform
food
 industries in poorer nations.
In addition
, organizations around the world could reduce the impact of
this
 phenomenon by donating necessities
such
 as rice and wheat to nations in need of them. To recapitulate, famine is a predicament that has yet to vanish in many parts of the world predominantly due to environmental challenges as well as the shortage of funds to support the development of the
food
 industry. While the difficulties in addressing
this
 issue are still apparent, there are various measures that can make an impact if properly executed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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