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Some countries have introduced a law to limit working hours for employees.Why is this law introduced?Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

Still, now there are lots of countries,
they
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 do not follow any
time
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limitation
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rules
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 for
work
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. While it’s bringing many assets,
employees
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also
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 face some problems
such
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 as they are getting sick, and they cannot spend quality
time
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 with their
family
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families
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. In my view,
this
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 is a positive step and can bring benefits not only
society
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to society
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 but physically and mentally too. Bounding a
time
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limitation
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, it is significant for
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workers
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workers'
worker's
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 health.
This
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 is simply because
without
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,without
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time
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a time
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 limit law, they will take too much pressure
about
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on
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 their job.
As a
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result
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employees
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 are suffering from different kinds of health diseases. Even they are getting mentally depressed.
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, in my
country
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,country
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 there is no
time
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limitation
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 for
workers
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. My uncle working in the community
center
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centre
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, doing
nonstop
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a nonstop
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shift
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shifts
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 as
rules
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 of
company
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the company
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,
he
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and he
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 gets physically
week
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weak
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. Because of these reasons,
workers
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 stay all the
time
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 in stress. Day by day they are getting incited person. Without starting a
time
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limitation
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work
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, it is so harmful
for
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to
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employees
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employees'
employee's
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body
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bodies
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 and
mind
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minds
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. That’s why all countries need to familiar
time
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 bounding
rule
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rules
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with
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for
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 their
workers
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.
In addition
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 to, doing
work
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 24/7 hours, it stays far away from their family. They cannot spend enough
time
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 with
families
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their families
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. Huge distance
grow
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grows
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 up to family and relatives. Some relatives
also
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taunting
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taunt
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 there
to
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for
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 being a busy
person
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people
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. Family and friends do not understand
about
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apply
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our
countries
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country's
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time
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 bounding
rules
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. My father,
for example
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,
he
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apply
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is a banker. Several types of
work
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 pressure encumbered him. Most of the
time
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 he came
to
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apply
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home
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the home
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 after 10 P.m. He cannot attend any family function. Even we cannot see him every day because of his late. Because of
this
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 type of gap
workers
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gradually
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are gradually
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 far away from their social life and own corner.
Limitation
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 of
work
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 is very helpful to
gets
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get
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 spear
time
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 for socializing and strong our family bonding In conclusion,
although
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 exorbitant
work
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 is
also
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 useful for getting
a
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apply
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rich, I strongly feel that we need
to
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apply
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time
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rules
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 for
work
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. If every country introduced
to
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apply
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low
time
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 limit
rules
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 with their
employees
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, they will develop health and
sincere
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be sincere
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 about their families.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • well-being
  • fatigue
  • stress
  • mental health
  • innovation
  • leisure industry
  • economic impact
  • labor costs
  • competitiveness
  • workforce
  • part-time workers
  • shift workers
  • sectors
  • cultural shift
  • personal time
  • global impact
  • standardizing
  • employee well-being
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