The diagrams below show the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

These diagrams depict the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work. It is clear from the graphs that several changes and new things are suggested to well be built in the proposed changes and change the general shape inside the house. According to what is shown,
kitchen
furniture is the bigger change was added to the proposed change for the house.
In addition
, the Hall is removed. While the location of the stairs and the internal door was changed as well only one of the internal
door
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doors

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is still there. To sum
up
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,up

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we could say that the living room became bigger as the
kitchen
turned smaller after removing one of the internal
wall
Change to a plural noun
walls

The singular countable noun wall follows the quantifier one of, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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,
kitchen
furniture was added, the shape of the stairs was changed which led to reducing the space between the living room and the
kitchen
and
as a result
to that the Hall was disappeared.
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