Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences this style of parenting have on children as they get older?

SAMPLE ANSWER Parenting is an important responsibility that cannot be taken with levity.
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, there are diverse approaches to it. Some
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are exponents of the authoritative method while others opt to be permissive. I
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advocate for a balanced approach to parenting as I believe the permissive style could have dire consequences as I would be discussing
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.✅ Primarily, childhood is the most critical stage where
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can mould
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and imbibe values.
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,
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at
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stage are not mature enough to exercise good judgement.
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, leaving
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entirely to them could be dangerous.
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, a toddler who prefers to run independently should not be allowed to do so on a busy road no matter the level of tantrums exhibited to avoid road traffic
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.
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true that
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should be allowed to reason and exercise their independence sometimes,
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should
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be done with caution.
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, I really do not subscribe to the permissive approach to raising
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.✅ Admittedly, some
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prefer the permissive method.
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decision is not without its drawbacks though and one of them is poor
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in the child.
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, they are unable to delay gratification. These kinds of
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are considered 'spoilt' because they always want to have their way and do not fit well in
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repercussion is that these
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tend to have
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threshold for frustration as adults as they have not developed the resilience required to deal with adversity.
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, they buckle under little pressure and may end up with mental health challenges.An instance of
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is a patient that was admitted on account of attempted suicide following a break-up with
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. It was reported that he was an only child of aged
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who left no stone unturned to ensure he was always pleased. Evidently, his upbringing did not prepare him for the emotional setback associated with relationship issues which eventually culminated
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a mental health challenge.✅ In conclusion,
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permissive parenting is preferred by
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who want to please their
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always, the balanced approach supersedes it and should be encouraged.
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, permissive parenting must be discouraged because it leads to poor
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in young ones and poorly adjusted adults.✅ @IeltsEmirates

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  • responsibility
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