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The money spent by hovernments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree .

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There's a heated discussion about how the government allocated people's tax money for. And
this
 essay will unravel
this
 issue. Looking at how much we paid for taxes and letting the government allocate our money for our benefits. By all ,means we all have the right to question whether they're spending our money in the right places.
First
, we need to look at what will benefit we as a citizen will get when they're investing in
space
programmes
.
Space
programmes
 prove that our
country
 has the professionals, capacities and resources to explore the most difficult adventure in human history.
This
 kind of investment will make our
country
 to be known as a
country
 that has all the capabilities to do that. And it will lead to business deals and strengthen our currency.
Secondly
, we
also
 should look at the current condition of our
country
. Before having a
space
 programme, our
country
 should have considered whether our public services are already adequate enough to sustain the
space
programmes
 themselves.
For example
, to have
a
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a space programme
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space
programmes
, you need to have a professional
to
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apply
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run it. So it means that you'll need an adequate school to produce that kind of professional people. The decision that our
country
 makes should be based on that consideration for
a
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the
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 long term. Whether we'll have our currency strengthened or have the ability to sustain it. In conclusion, looking at our current situation it's better to strengthen our foundation
first
 rather than skipping and going to the big prize. It means we should focus on how we can produce professionals
first
 rather than having
space
programmes
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