Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes, others argue that this money should be spent on sports facilities for ordinary people. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some
people
argue that
sports
facilities for top
athletes
should be spent more
money
by
government
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the government

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. Others have a contrary opinion which is spending more
mony
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money

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for
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sports
facilities for ordinary
people
. I think the
government
should find out a balance spot to
benefits
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benefit

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top
athletes
and ordinary
people
. Training top
athletes
to achieve new
honors
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honours

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in international competitions is a manifestation of the country’s strength, which is an indispensable factor in national diplomacy, but it
also
cost
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a lot of
money
. From the dormitory to the training ground, it
spend
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spends

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many construction costs. It
also
expend
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a lot of
money
from coaches to medical staff and nutritionists. For the
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instant

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instand
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instance

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, children usually learn to play football from the age of 6-8, and the annual cost ranges from 10000
yuan
to 60000
yuan
. According to
this
algorithm, it will spend at least 300000
yuan
from the beginning of learning to the age of 19, and as high as 600000
yuan
.
This
is a huge pay expense for most families in China
,
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so
that
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many
parent
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parents

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are unwilling to let their children learn
sports
.
Therefore
, the
government
needs to undertake the responsibility of training
athletes
.
On the contrary
, others argue that
government
should invest more
money
for
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in

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ordinary
people
. China has a population of 1400000000, but there are only dozens of top
athletes
, so the
government
should spend more on public facilities.
On the other hand
,
government
revenue comes from taxes paid by ordinary
people
,
therefore
the
government
should pay more attention to
people
’s
livehood
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livelihood

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projects
,
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so that the public can obtain the return of taxes. In my opinion, it is equally important to cultivate top
athletes
and attach importance to the
sports
of ordinary
people
. Developing top
athletes
to win glory for the country is conducive to the country’s external construction, but paying attention to
people
’s
livehood
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livelihood

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projects is instrumental in the country’s internal construction. But the population of ordinary
people
for
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apply

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exceeds that of top
athletes
. The country should follow
the
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reality and find a balance point that benefits
athletes
and common
people
. In conclusion, the cost of both is equally important, but the
government
ought to explore a balance to benefit them at the same time.
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