Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the negative impacts on society and family life?

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Some
people
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argue that the government is waiting for resources in certain aspects
such
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as
arts
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,
paintings
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and they should spend the funds
for
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on
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public services like
education
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, transport and healthcare. From my point of view,
although
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arts
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such
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as painting and music
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vital to relax
in
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on
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daily
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, the governments should spend the expense
of for
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public service There is no denying that some entertainment programs
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as art,
paintings
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are important activities that help
people
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relax in their leisure time.
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, these activities help
people
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reduce stress and their
mind
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after busy working hours.
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,
people
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feel more energetic by participating in these activities.
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,
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research from Harvard University found that doing two things at the same time like listening to music and studying helps
people
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improve their mood, motivates learners and improves memory.
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,
arts
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are considered a major source of income
to
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a nation.
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, in the USA, there are a large number of
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arts
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museums over the country where millions of visitors come each year to experience different cultures that
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the economy earn a huge amount of money.
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, investing more money in some public services
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as
education
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,
transport
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have
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several advantages not only for individuals but
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for society.
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with,
education
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plays an important role in the development of the country.
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means that if a nation invests in the development of
education
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, the economy will grow faster than
other
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countries which bring more opportunity for jobs and better quality of life to
people
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.
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, in order for society to become more modernized, every nation needs a large number of engineers, doctors, experts and so on.
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that is
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the reason why the government should invest more in
education
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.
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, public transport should be invested to make and meet the demand of humans.
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,
people
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can save on travel expenses, limit the impact of outside weather and enjoy a good time when
traveling
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by bus.
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, the community will reduce traffic
jam
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,
environmental
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and environmental
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pollution from private cars.
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,
this
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is
reason
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why the government should invest in public service to
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people’s
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people’
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life become more
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and convenient. In conclusion, it is clear that spending money
for
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on
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some public services is beneficial both for an individual and
the
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society.
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