The use of mobile phones should be banned in public spaces as libraries, transportations and shpos. To what extant do agree or disagree?

In
this
modern era,
mobile
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the mobile

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phone
is
basic
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a basic
the basic

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necessity for every individual. But some masses say that
phones
prohibited
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are prohibited

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on
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in

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public spots. Here
i
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I

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am totally agreed with
this
situation my statement and my arguments will be briefly described in
upcoming
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an upcoming
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paragraph with
crystal
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a crystal

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clear conclusion. To commence with, a large no of
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the community

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community
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communities

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say
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says

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that mobile
phones
should
banned
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ban
be banned

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in public places like
as
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apply

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libraries, shops and transportation. To elaborate
it
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apply

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, many
people
are going to libraries for
peaceful
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the peaceful

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environment because they can study properly there without any
distraction
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distractions

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libraries always
maintaining
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maintain

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the
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apply

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silence but sometimes
few
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a few

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irresponsible persons are using cell
phones
on
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in

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that place
they
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which

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disturbed others.
For
instance
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,instance

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I remember
last
month I visited the library there one person is getting
a
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phone calls
a phone call

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phone
calls
countinously
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continuously

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he was attending the all
calls
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call

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people
listening
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tolistening

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him and feel
te
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the

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disturbance.
Moreover
, in public transport
majority
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the majority

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of
people
using
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use

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a
smart
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smartphone

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phone
while travelling to their destination for work in that
bzy
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by

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tym
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,tym

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some
people
click
a photos
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a photo
photos

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or record
a videos
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videos
a video

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and Spoiled the peace of mind.
Thus
the
phones
should
restricted
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restrict
be restricted

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in public spots.
Furthermore
,
other
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another

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big proportion against
this
statement that
a
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an

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applying a ban on cell
phones
on
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in

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the
a

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social
place
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places

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. In the other words,
phones
are most important for everyone because 80% of all persons
businesses
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business

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by their smartphone in some places public telephone
boths
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booths
both

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are available but in few
places
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,places

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telephone both there are no telephone both nearby in
this
situation faces
a
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apply

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a lot
lot

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alot
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lot

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of difficulties To sum up, folks should aware to know where to use
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their phone

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phone
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phones

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and where not yet, they do not try to disturb
other
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others

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and their attention.
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