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The use of mobile phones should be banned in public spaces as libraries, transportations and shpos. To what extant do agree or disagree?

#phones #spaces #libraries #transportations #shpos
In
this
 modern era,
mobile
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the mobile
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phone
 is
basic
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a basic
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 necessity for every individual. But some masses say that
phones
prohibited
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on
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in
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 public spots. Here
i
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I
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 am totally agreed with
this
 situation my statement and my arguments will be briefly described in
upcoming
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an upcoming
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 paragraph with
crystal
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 clear conclusion. To commence with, a large no of
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the community
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community
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communities
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say
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 that mobile
phones
 should
banned
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ban
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 in public places like
as
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apply
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libraries, shops and transportation. To elaborate
it
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apply
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, many
people
 are going to libraries for
peaceful
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the peaceful
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 environment because they can study properly there without any
distraction
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distractions
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 libraries always
maintaining
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the
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apply
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silence but sometimes
few
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a few
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 irresponsible persons are using cell
phones
on
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in
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 that place
they
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which
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 disturbed others.
For
instance
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,instance
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 I remember
last
 month I visited the library there one person is getting
a
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phone calls
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phone
 calls
countinously
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continuously
 he was attending the all
calls
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call
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people
listening
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tolistening
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 him and feel
te
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the
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 disturbance.
Moreover
, in public transport
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
using
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use
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 a
smart
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smartphone
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phone
 while travelling to their destination for work in that
bzy
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by
tym
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,tym
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 some
people
 click
a photos
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a photo
photos
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 or record
a videos
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videos
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 and Spoiled the peace of mind.
Thus
 the
phones
 should
restricted
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restrict
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 in public spots.
Furthermore
,
other
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another
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 big proportion against
this
 statement that
a
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an
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 applying a ban on cell
phones
on
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in
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the
a
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social
place
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places
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. In the other words,
phones
 are most important for everyone because 80% of all persons
businesses
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business
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 by their smartphone in some places public telephone
boths
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booths
both
 are available but in few
places
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,places
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 telephone both there are no telephone both nearby in
this
 situation faces
a
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apply
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a lot
lot
alot
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lot
 of difficulties To sum up, folks should aware to know where to use
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their phone
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phone
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phones
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 and where not yet, they do not try to disturb
other
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others
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 and their attention.
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