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Nowadays eating habits of people around the world are changing, causing them many health problems, including obesity. Why do people tend to eat so badly? What can be done to improve their eating habits?

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Diet
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health
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problems
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 are on the rise,
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 eating habits of most
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 around the globe.
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 has caused obesity amongst others.
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 essay will discuss the
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 eating trends and some possible solutions to improve them.
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related stress
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 in regular jobs do not have the luxury of eating a home-cooked meal because there is the need to report to work early and leave late.
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 leaves no room to prepare a healthy meal from home resulting in ordering junk food online . For these ,reasons many have resorted to eating foods
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 and chips from regular fast food joints.
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle
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 a wide range of
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diet-related
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diet related
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 diseases
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 as obesity, diabetes and hypertension. Most
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 do not engage in any physical activities after their meal.
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causes
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 a buildup of fat causing weight gain, and high sugar levels in the blood. To add up, lack of regular
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causes
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diet related
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health
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 conditions.
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 Organization has recorded an increase in Diabetes and Hypertension in
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 who do not engage in regular physical activities.
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, lifestyle and lack of regular physical activities
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causes
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health
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problems
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 related to
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. Some possible solutions to these
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 are creating time out of busy schedules to prepare healthy meals for work and engaging in regular
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People
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 who have long working hours can create time during the weekend to cook healthy meals which they can take to work on
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 basis.
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, organizations can offer to provide at least one healthy meal for its
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exercises
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 reduces one’s risk for diseases
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 as obesity, diabetes and hypertension.
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people
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 who engage in physical exercise are at lower risk of developing cardiovascular diseases.
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 increases the quality of life and
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 most
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 are healthy. In conclusion, eating habits are evolving
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 of
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle and lack of regular
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exercises
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exercise
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,engaging in regular physical
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 and making a conscious effort to eat a healthy meal is beneficial and will reduce
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diet related
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problems
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • processed food
  • fast food
  • nutritional education
  • calorie-dense
  • nutrient-poor
  • convenience
  • busy lifestyles
  • food deserts
  • marketing and advertising
  • food choices
  • cultural norms
  • food preparation
  • obesity
  • eating habits
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