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Band 4.5

some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Completing different
community
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 service projects can not only have great benefits - both academically and emotionally - for the
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 but
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 be beneficial for certain groups of people who are in grave need.
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, if it becomes compulsory, I believe, the result will be counterproductive. Below is the explanation for the fact that I am against making
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altruistic behaviour an obligatory action.
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 of all, there might be
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 who prefer to work their extra time to earn money and save for their university tuition. The obligation of unpaid
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works
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 will prevent them from achieving their goal.
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, it is possible that some
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 have more responsibilities at home
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 as helping parents to take care of their
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 or assisting their grandparents. Forcing
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 to perform
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 tasks at school would be intolerable.
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, obliging
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 to carry out a task against their passion can be demotivating.
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,
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 an idea could have some advantages.
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, helping
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 by
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large number of
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 service providers increases the satisfaction and well-being of
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society.
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, making
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 clear the streets or parks of rubbish contributes to the
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’s beautification. In summary, it is clear that the facts that could exacerbate the intention of
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community
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 service
outweighs
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 the benefits.
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, I highly recommend that
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 services must be optional.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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