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some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Completing different
community
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 service projects can not only have great benefits - both academically and emotionally - for the
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 but
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 be beneficial for certain groups of people who are in grave need.
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, if it becomes compulsory, I believe, the result will be counterproductive. Below is the explanation for the fact that I am against making altruistic behaviour an obligatory action.
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 of all, there might be
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 who prefer to work their extra time to earn money and save for their university tuition. The obligation of unpaid
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 work will prevent them from achieving their goal.
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, it is possible that some
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 have more responsibilities at home
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 as helping parents to take care of their siblings or assisting their grandparents. Forcing
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 group of
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 to perform the same tasks at school would be intolerable.
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, obliging
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 to carry out a task against their passion can be demotivating.
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,
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 an idea could have some advantages.
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, helping the elderly by a large number of
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 service providers increases the satisfaction and well-being of society.
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, making
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 clear the streets or parks of rubbish contributes to the
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’s beautification.
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, teaching sports to younger children improves their leadership skills. In summary, it is clear that the fact that could exacerbate the intention of
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community
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 service outweighs the benefits.
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, I highly recommend that
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community
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 services must be optional and schools must consider them as an optional part of the study.

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