Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Over the
last
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half-century, the pace of change in the life of human beings has increased beyond our wildest expectations.
This
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rapid change has created a wide sector of people who are in need
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help to adapt to
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modern society.
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, numerous organizations all over the world have started free
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service programs.
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there are some commentators who believe that youth participation in these
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should be always a personal option, I am strongly inclined towards the opinion that it should be an obligatory part of
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school
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curriculum.
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, youngsters who participate in
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charity work teaching English to newcomers
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and helping
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young children to learn sports, gain great experience, knowledge and moral values that will significantly influence their future studies in college or their careers.
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, a recent study conducted in London has shown that high
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pupils who worked in unpaid
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service achieved higher scores in their college exams.
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, a lot of individuals in the society will have better access to the
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offered by the
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through those ambitious and active
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.
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, the government could save
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that can be allocated to other nationwide
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such
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as the construction of roads, hospitals, and other projects. Undoubtedly great benefits will come from involving free
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services
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in high
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programs.
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, a strong argument can be made on the opposite side.
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with, opponents think that these free activities might delay secondary
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students
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from joining
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college.
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, many high
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students
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need to work to save
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for their university
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,
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,
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recent statistics have revealed that more than 25% of high
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student
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students
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worked casual jobs to save
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for their high
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student worked casual jobs to save
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for
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future
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studies.
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,
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the high
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school
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curriculum is already overwhelmed by various subjects,
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it
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free
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becomes
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a compulsory pack,
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this
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will burden the
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. To sum up, it can be clearly seen that the pros of adding society service
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high
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program
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programs
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outweigh the cons. I do recommend that the ministry of education encourage high
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implements these steps
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our
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better.
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