You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Over the
last
half-century, the pace of change in the life of human beings has increased beyond our wildest expectations.
This
rapid change has created a wide sector of people who are in need
for
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help to adapt to
this
modern society.
Consequently
, numerous organizations all over the world have started free
community
service programs.
Although
there are some commentators who believe that youth participation in these
services
should be always a personal option, I am strongly inclined towards the opinion that it should be an obligatory part of
high
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school
curriculum.
Firstly
, youngsters who participate in
the
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charity work teaching English to newcomers
helping
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and helping
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young children to learn sports, gain great experience, knowledge and moral values that will significantly influence their future studies in college or their careers.
For example
, a recent study conducted in London has shown that high
school
pupils who worked in unpaid
community
service achieved higher scores in their college exams.
Furthermore
, a lot of individuals in the society will have better access to the
services
offered by the
community
through those ambitious and active
students
.
Lastly
, the government could save
money
that can be allocated to other nationwide
services
such
as the construction of roads, hospitals, and other projects. Undoubtedly great benefits will come from involving free
community
services
in high
school
programs.
On the other hand
, a strong argument can be made on the opposite side.
To begin
with, opponents think that these free activities might delay secondary
school
students
from joining
the
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college.
In addition
, many high
school
students
need to work to save
money
for their university
study
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studies
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,
for instance
,
a
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recent statistics have revealed that more than 25% of high
school
student
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students
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worked casual jobs to save
money
for their high
school
student worked casual jobs to save
money
for
the
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future
of
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studies.
Moreover
,
high
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school
curriculum is already overwhelmed by various subjects,
thus
it
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free
services
becomes
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a compulsory pack,
this
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which
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will burden the
students
. To sum up, it can be clearly seen that the pros of adding society service
in
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high
school
program
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programs
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outweigh the cons. I do recommend that the ministry of education encourage high
school
implements these steps
make
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our
community
better.
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